Legion World Forums LEGION OUTPOST Bits o' Legionnaire Business The Legion Cartoon Ate My Brain Eleven Ways...

...starting about four months ago. This plus prolonged unemployment led to the following fic. I mention both title and main character POV, in case you wanna' skip ahead to the chapter where I totally messed up your favorite. [wipes away flop sweat]

Warnings: If you thought the cartoon was a hatchet job, this fic is unlikely to change your mind. If you've never watched the cartoon, you will be very confused, very quickly.

Contains, Angst, Stupid Jokes, Underage Drinking, Bad Language, Run-On Sentences.

Does not contain: Anything but vague allusions to action sequences, either real action sequences or the wink-wink-nudge-nudge kind.

1.[/b] Bending Like A Willow Tree (Chameleon Boy)] [b]2.[/b] Lost In The Sky (Shrinking Violet)

[b]3. Drown Them Out (Star Boy) 4.[/b] Running Around (Dream Girl)

[b]5.[/b] Meditations (Bouncing Boy) [b]6.[/b] Heavenly (Triplicate Girl)

[b]7.[/b] Blackberry Blossoms (Timber Wolf) [b]8. Empty Cup (Phantom Girl)

[b]9.[/b] Stranger Than Love (Cosmic Boy) [b]10.[/b] If You Live (Lightning Lad)

[b]11.[/b] A Few Thousand Days Ago (Saturn Girl)

Cheers !

They're all great, two thumbs up from me. I reccommend this story to those on this forum that likes a good old read.

Wonderful characterization.

[bows]

Your checks are in the mail, my honorary FF.net sibs.

Instead of a check I'm willing to be paid in constructive criticism for this drabble I posted in my Elseworlds thread. But, either way, glad to help out an FF.net sib.

Okay, done. Commentary anyway-- don't know how constructive it is. Also I got confused because I went looking for the thread here first. D'oh !!

I find your stuff well-written and I love the detail. In the Uetna/Kingdom Come/LSH thing, I think I noticed a couple of grammar or spelling bobbles but nothing that would cause a lot of trouble. Unfortunately, that's about all I can offer, given my lack of familiarity with the original works involved-- apart from LSH itself. Sorry.

Danke.

Some of the little details made me laugh, such as Lightning Lad's memories of Ayla on a combine, harvesting triticale.

Cool characterizations, and I think you really started getting into them about halfway, 'through, as the stories got longer and more involved.

Awww...

Believe me, when I finished, it was really tempting to go back to the beginning and rewrite everything. (That would have brought the rewrite times on Ch. 1 up to about... uh, fifty, though.) And once you start going around in circles like that, where does it stop ? (Yikes.)

One reason I'll always be sorry there was no S.3 is because I really wanted to see what they'd do with Ayla. Someday, maybe...

Thanks for reading.