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Thanks, Abin! I am so glad you dug it.

Your characters are so much fun to explore because they not only have "tentposts" of established history, but also these wonderful mysterious gaps that make the reader go, "hmm... I wonder what happened there". Thanks so much for letting me fill in a bit of My Whee's past.


And Ibby... seriously, dude... your cameo scenes are AMAZING!

They are so good, and really show how much legwork you must have done before writing them. So many good ones, but my absolute favorite was Crymsun acting as a "catalyst" for Raging Bull. Just a brilliant use of that powerset!

I am almost done with "Truth and Perfection". If anyone has any feedback or would like their character to have a cameo in the finale please speak now.

Thanks, Ex And thank YOU for your projects, which have brought so many LMBers to life. I like the cool powersets many of them have in your stories.

Emily, sent you a PM about that plot topic you asked me about. Thanks for asking for feedback!

WHOOOO-HOOO! Phil Marlowe debuts in 'Klordny'!

The story is now complete. I have no idea what I will work on next. I went to the library yesterday and got a book on the Renaissance, so I might do some more work with the setting of places like Nasger and Raltvee.

I am also currently doing research on the Mongols/Yuan for school, so if anybody wants to build up the background of the Khanate I could help.

hey all,
i'm trying to get more into the fanfic arena and i would love some feed back on the story I've been working on.

it follows the Reboot legion. I'd appreciate any advice and comments!

and thanks to Razsolo and IB for all their comments and help so far!

which if anyone isn't reading anything by these two then you should!

In love with Razsolo's take on the retro legion. his stuff is better than the actual title imho.

Hi, Omni.

I just checked out the first chapter of your story. I'm not as familiar with the Post-Zero Hour Legion as I am with other versions. That being said, I think you did a really good job establishing very distinct voices for such a large cast... especially for someone like myself who is more used to the Pre-booters.

Brainy, Wildfire, and Shikari particularly stood out for me as very "realistically" voiced.

And by the way, great cliffhanger in the last three paragraphs. I love a good twist! I look forward to reading the rest of what you've written.

I.B. is currently ROCKING Lord of the Oval ...

(as is everyone) but IB's basically running the entire LMB as Non player characters! BRAVO!


Dev also wrote a particularly moving sequence!

:clap: :clap: :clap:

or maybe this will make a clapping sound if I put enough ...

Thanks for your help Peebz. I really was wondering how to frame the whole thing, and having the three of them show up made it work perfectly.

IB is amazing in his ability to let so many shine with one sentence/sequence a piece.

Can't wait to see where the rest of my characters end up after this...or will they?

thank you so much Exnihil! i try to get the voices to be as distinct as possible.

i do have a question is this series easy to get into or does it seem to have to much baggage/references to things that have come before????


i love that Brainy and Shikari and Wildfire are your faves because i feel like i had the hardest time writing them. lol

Thanks Dev, Peebz

Truth be told, I wouldn't have thought about bringing in the rest of the LMB if it weren't for the body of work the rest of you did.

One thing my Dark Oval co-writers particularly shine at is creating new characters! Peebz' Drinking Buddies, Dev's extended Em family and Angdar Fel, Lardy's Lard Knights and the Taylors, Cobie's Space Knights Templar, Tempest's shades, and so on...

Hi Omni,

I echo what Ex said - I love how you stay as true as possible to the voices and histories of these Legionnaires. I think you've done a great job of keeping it as a continuation to the series.

PS thanks too for your comments on my stories!

*blush* Thanks Omni! I am about to post the first part of a multi-parter featuring the League of Super-Assassins..

I agree with the other commenters (commentators?), you have done a great job of giving everyone in your Legion their own voice, and they are all recognisably the postboot Legionnaires as distinct from any other version too!

thank you both soo much! i really am happy that these characters stand out on there own!

Speaking of which, it\'s pretty good!

I'm a big Super-Assassins fan.

Neutrax and Lazon are fun to work with, powers-wise, although Titania and Silver Slasher seem more potentially interesting, personality-wise, and Mist Master just seems like a jerk with no redeeming features...

Supergirl's overconfidence, and unpreparedness was intriguing. Individual character arcs (such as Supergirl learning that she's not on vacation in the 31st century, and that things need to be taken seriously, and coming back for a much more competent second showing) are hard to write in a 20 page story (especially one featuring twenty protagonists and at least a half-dozen other main characters!), making fanfic like this a great place to explore such things!

I particularly like how Mon-El dealt with the same threat, using his keen intellect, and yet also taking quite a risk.

I'm looking forward to the next installment!

^ I also love how Bouncing Boy looked out for his teammates AND had excellent battle tactics. I have a newfound respect for him and Mon.

(can't wait to see new Legionnaires Nightwind and Shadow Lad in action too!)

Thanks!

I'm really glad Supergirl's attitude is coming across! I am consciously trying to show that she and Superboy aren't just gender reversed versions of one another and that they really do approach their time in the 31st century in very different ways...

And one of the things in general I am really enjoying about writing these characters is thinking about the different ways they would approach the same problems...Mon-El, Ultra Boy, Superboy and Supergirl shouldn't be interchangeable just because they all have more or less the same powerset, so it's a fun challenge figuring out ways to show that.

re: Bouncing Boy, I touched on this in the War of the Fatal Fives thread, but I reckon Chuck deserves a lot more respect than he gets. His power is physically formidable, and I imagine teaching at the Academy would really have honed his tactics and ability to work as part of a team..

Bouncing's often portrayed as more of a tactical power. Like a billiard's player, it's all about setting up the angles, and having to be aware of everything around your target, since, once you get really moving, the course is fixed, so to speak. (Of course, Chuck also has a Flight Ring, and can adjust his bounces on the fly, allowing him to put some impossible 'English' on his bank shots...)

Speedball was used similarly over in the New Warriors, using his powers to disorient others and set them up for 'big gun' teammates like Nova or Namorita to take down.

It's a cool power, and, to me, gives Chuck a bit of a 'working man's hero' kind of feel.

EX, check the folder I just put up on FB. You'll find a portrait of My Whee Fem.

Enjoy!

My Whee Fem

Cool, I look forward to checking it out...

But no luck with that link, though - even logged in to FB. I think you might have the permissions set incorrectly on it or something, because I only get a "content is currently unavailable" message.

It works for me...

Yeah, there are photo album permissions that let you share with either everybody, just your friends, or a category called "only me" that hides it from everybody but yourself. Your album probably just defaulted to that last category.

(Although why FB would have a category that lets one post pictures that nobody else can see makes no sense to me... like a lot of things on FB. )

Okay, should be fixed.

My Whee is GORGEOUS, Abin! Wow, wow, and wow!

Ex, I haven't read ALL your posts yet on Long Klordny, but I'm really awed at your writing style. Your voice just really shines through.

I imagine it helps people into illegal dealings

Ex,

I absolutely loved Matlocks Columbo speak when he first shows up. Very well done.

Thanks, Dev. I loved Columbo growing up and when I think, "rumpled detective" there's just no other voice I can hear for that character.


Ha-cha-cha!


I'm really looking forward to that conversation when my wife reads my story:

She - What are you doing writing romantic fiction about some cute asian girl?

Me - Oh, don't worry, hon. It's really just some fifty-something guy from Rhode Island.

She - That doesn't make it better!!!